Nicole Lynn

Right off the bat the first thing I noticed was the spacing of the paragraphs. Reading on the computer screen for a lot of people is difficult, so double spacing ...

Well done! This is very intriguing which means you must continue it, of course. I have a few suggestions, as I always do- after that’s we’re all here for isn’t ...

The first thing I picked up while reading this was that she/ he seemed to be in a trance. Like she/ he was being drawn towards the church, so the ...

This was really great. I liked it a lot. There are only a few things I will suggest. One being, separate the paragraphs for a lot of people- including me- ...

This starts off good, but towards the end it goes a little rampant. It first gets a little confusing when she looks for the boy. “It was almost a call, ...

I liked this- it was very sweet and tender. It really flowed nicely, and was very imaginative. There isn’t really anything for me to critique… at least in my opinion. ...

If there was more punctuation it would have been a little easier to understand. For example: "Our story isn’t over- It’s just a commercial break. Wherever I go- Your love ...

Ok, well first off: slow down! Go into a little more background on the girls. What happened to their parents? How old are they? What do they look like? With ...

I liked this a lot. I did get confused when she said "as if". IN the opening paragraph you make it to be in the past, but adding the modern ...

There is good and bad to this. The good is that I liked it, and it was very entertaining. I think glorifying smoking is ok just as long as it ...